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Free Indirect Discourse

/friː ˌɪndɪˈrɛkt ˈdɪskɔːrs/ noun
IN ONE SENTENCE

A technique that blends a character's voice and thoughts into the third-person narration, without quotation marks or 'she thought' tags.

Definition

Free indirect discourse is a sneaky, elegant technique where the narrator's voice and the character's voice merge. The prose stays in third person, but the word choice, rhythm, and attitude shift to match the character's inner perspective. There are no 'she thought' tags or quotation marks - the character's mind just bleeds into the narration. If you have ever read a sentence in a novel that was technically third person but sounded exactly like the character was thinking it, that was free indirect discourse.

Why It Matters

This is one of the most powerful tools in a fiction writer's toolkit, and it is surprisingly underused by newer writers. It lets you stay in third person while giving the reader the intimacy of first person. You can slide into a character's head for a sentence, then pull back to a wider narrative view, all without clunky transitions. Once you learn to spot it, you will see it everywhere in great fiction.

Types of Free Indirect Discourse

Thought-colored narration +
Perception-filtered description +
Emotional escalation +

Famous Examples

Mrs Dalloway — Virginia Woolf

Woolf practically invented the modern use of free indirect discourse. She shifts between characters' perspectives seamlessly, with the prose taking on each character's unique rhythm and preoccupations.

Emma — Jane Austen

Austen was one of the earliest and best practitioners. Her narration adopts Emma's confidence and snobbishness so smoothly that readers often share Emma's blind spots until Austen pulls back to reveal the truth.

Normal People — Sally Rooney

Rooney uses free indirect discourse to move between Connell and Marianne's perspectives, letting the reader feel how each character misreads the other while the narration stays in tight third person.

Common Mistakes

Adding unnecessary thought tags

If you write 'She thought he was an idiot,' try 'He was an idiot.' In free indirect discourse, the context makes it clear this is the character's judgment, not the narrator's fact.

Losing track of whose perspective you are in

When using free indirect discourse with multiple characters, make sure the reader always knows whose mind they are inside. A stray thought from the wrong character is jarring.

Mixing it with head-hopping

Free indirect discourse works best when you stay in one character's perspective per scene. Jumping between heads within the same paragraph creates confusion, not intimacy.

Try It Yourself

Quick Exercise

Write a scene where a character arrives at a job interview. Write it in third person, but let the character's anxiety color every observation without ever using phrases like 'she felt' or 'he thought.' Make the narration sound like the character's inner voice. Aim for 400 words where every descriptive sentence reveals the character's state of mind.

CONTINUE LEARNING
Writing the Draft
Practice slipping into and out of your character's perspective within third-person narration. Start by writing a 'she thought' sentence, then delete the tag and adjust until the thought feels naturally embedded in the prose.